Oh! This poem iso wonderfully written! I absolutley love your choice of words; they help get the feeling across better, I think.
The flow was really natural, also.
My favourite part was the second stanza int he second line; it was astonishingly beautiful.
Post another soon?
-Krystal[:

Very Intriguing write. The value of love is much more immense than people give it credit for. You have shown that with these beautiful words.

Shall the signal of my death come as a whisper to your ears
And the moment of passing enjoy a pause where your lungs
Will gather breath deep from within you where my memory sleeps.

^ We all hope that love is so deep between us that when the moment comes if we are not together that somehow we will know and have the feeling surmount us. These lines were outstanding and meant so much in this write. ..."And the moment of passing enjoy a pause where your lungs
Will gather breath deep from within you where my memory sleeps"

Beautiful write and much enjoyed.
Take Care,
Kay

Wow Tom what a really beautiful poem and to top it off it was beautifully written and presented. Well done

Grant

Very deep and emotional. amazing poem.

That is a totally new way of looking at death. I loved the images it invoked in my mind's eye and the feeling of grief so tangible, like a last goodbye.
I loved the contrast between "last expressions of my life" and "eternity" - really brought the poem together.

Much late for my gratitude, but thanks for commenting on my poem a while back =)
Please excuse my tardiness.

This a beautiful piece. the emotion is intense yet subtle. very unique, i like how you apply death to a person in this.

This a beautiful piece. the emotion is intense yet subtle. very unique, i like how you apply death to a person in this.

I really enjoyed this poem the flow was so natural, yet held so much, the emotions, i could picture it, you have an amazing talent. my only wish is i could be half as good as you. you really capture the moment. beautiful write. 5/5 xx

May the signal of my death come as a gentle whisper to your ear
~this is my favorite line but I absolutely loved the entire thing, flow was great and outstanding wording I really loved it :) :) 5/5

How shall i love thee, good i think indeed upon your last to receive your first but only love. well done thou hast touched the heart upon which no regret shall rest.