This is so moving..
I loved it
Fantastic
Keep writing :)

Amanda, you have such a beautiful way with words. It cannot be defined how moving they are. To anyone. You can somehow use your words to express so many different levels of emotions and meanings. This poem was so beautiful. It took my breath away. The realistic elements you used. The ones that only you and I know the true meaning to. You somehow stuck that all in here and gave it even more meaning than even I would first think of whenever I read it.

Nathan, all of the guys, they would be proud of your amazing talent. I think he would have really loved this, Amanda. I honestly do. It actually made my eyes water. It brought back so many memories... the good and the bad. One of the best poems I have ever read on this site. It's a shame that so many people have looked at it, yet, only me and one other have commented. It's a damn shame. They should know better.

I don't have a favorite stanza, though. I loved the entire poem as a whole. The last stanza really got to me however. I think you know why. It broke my heart reading that and remembering that night. It was so hard on all of us... I know that someday, maybe, we'll see them again. Hell, maybe even him again... I can't wait. It's going to be amazing.

Never stop writing. You have such a beautiful talent and it would be a shame to let it go to waste. I can't wait for you to start posting more poems up here. This was really great. I would have to be totally stupid not to give you a 5/5. Love you, big sis. <3 <3 <3 <3

~Kayla~

Too many I's , he's, his', forced rhyming, too many filler words......

I would like to add that I am sorry for your loss and my critique on the poem's flaws are not meant to disrespect your outpouring of emotion.