Well let me say that is very very sad thing and story to hear,

it si one of the bad in men , i know

it was a very sad one and very well expressed i could feel my self actulay can not sream and yell for help

but in poem wise, i will have to give you this pointers , :
frist dont make 1 big block of poem, it si bad for the reader to read ,
and work more ont eh rhyming thsoe 2 pointers make the poem perfect if you put feelings in them
even it is a sad one i think it is a very good one
encouragment

Very very good poem! amazing. i no how you feel. ive been through something similar i have a poem called "waiting" if u wana check it out 5/5