The hands tick slowly past
Minutes pass me by
I try to think of truths you've said
But they all turn into lies

^^ first off...love this stanza, cuz wel...i'm obsessed with time in my poetry. rofl. so this was great for me. :P

You thief! You cad! You scoundrel!
Taking what wasn't your's...
Leaving only emptiness
And closing open doors

^^ this made me laugh, the first line. the rest was absolutely beautiful.

great poem, babe. ^.^

Awww wow i loved it!!!

Awww!!! thats so sad..

First of all, I love this poem! I can completely relate. As I think most of us can. Its deffiantely a poem I would read again and again.

Your writting is very simple, the meaning very exposed, and it has a rhyme scheme. But its flow is kinda....blocked. It reads smothly, then gets a little off beat. But a few simple changes could perfect it. Overall, fantastic job. Truely one to be proud of.

The flow was very well done the message was very clear and the images of loss were very vivid I liked this a lot and the plot and story stretched out so you wanted to know what happend great work Plot121

OMg !! LoVeD iT !! iT wAs A gReAt pOeM .. kEeP wRiTiNg CuZ yOuR gOoD aT iT !!