I love it.
:):):):):):)

Hummm i liked it but i do think that it could be alot more in depth explain to us her/his qualites and what you love about 'em make us feel what your feeling help us to fall in love with him/her i mean its was good but i hope you know what i mean and if not message me and i can explain alot better! good tho

=]] it's good, and it flows together pretty well...
but pretty much i agree with Intoxicating Smile there, cuz we need to 'know' who this person is, what they are like and whatnot. it's like telling a story, in shorter, and sometimes;; even sweeter words.
i know it was ur first time,, and i kept that in mind.
It's excellent, but it still cud use work. But hey--ima not saying MINE doesn't need work. Cuz, i know it does. lol. it all depends on the person, u shud do wut u think, but i was jus throwing out some helpful tips.
if u want to talk about it//anything, msg me :D

Simple and sweet. I liked it.