Wow not finished yet?! It's amazing so far, very sweet, great flow. You started off and ended real well, i'm excited for the rest of it now :]

5/5 keep it up! :]

Oh please, finish!
The song is so good!
I write songs once in awhile but it's not nearly as good as this!
Great job.
I like it a lot.
(comment some of my poems, please. the new ones. I want your opinion on it.)
Thank you!!
Keep on writing, and finish the song!
--Justina

So far so good. there are little passages where the flow and rythem were slightly out. but that could be just the way i read it. the wording was excellent. an enjoyable read.

put some background music with it, finish the lyrics and you have a number 1 hit! :)

5/5 David

It's really well written but I feel that you should change the second line to "I get a reason to give it all up" - it kinda helps with the flow. But that's my opinion.
Other than that it's brilliant and the chorus says alot! 5/5 from me!

I don't know anything about songs and how to write them, but this is very good so far. i think that you can expand on this topic way more and come up with a amazing masterpiece. :] i think you are doing a great job, you are expressing your feelings and how you just want that one guy to be yours. this also has a pretty good flow. so, i think you are on the right track. i know so many can relate to this. well done. 5/5.

Don't know how many musicians there are here but i'm a fellow musician and i thought this was pretty good, altough i had a couple things you could maybe work on e.g.

"Now everytime I think I've found my true love
I get a reason to give up on it
Then I wonder why this is so tough
Everytime I end up disappointed"

when you end your 2nd verse with "up on it"
i think it's a two note end with the on being a whole note. and then ending your 4th verse with end up dissapointed, should be or with better world, it would be better if you would have the same 2 note ending, imo.

the second thing;

"All I need is that one guy
The one thats always been so true
The one that had the courage to give me all of him
And I had the strength to give him all of me too"

I think that u should delete the 4th verse and put a verse between the 2nd and 3rd and then let the third one rhyme with the second. The reason why is because imo when you use repeated parts in diffrent verses they should rhyme :) would sound better to me :)

anyways these aren't negative points but just my view on how you can make it even better :) hope it helped !

5/5, nice song all in all, just add another 4 versed stanza and then a 3 lined outro and the song will be great for sure ;)

peac

Don't know how many musicians there are here but i'm a fellow musician and i thought this was pretty good, altough i had a couple things you could maybe work on e.g.

"Now everytime I think I've found my true love
I get a reason to give up on it
Then I wonder why this is so tough
Everytime I end up disappointed"

when you end your 2nd verse with "up on it"
i think it's a two note end with the on being a whole note. and then ending your 4th verse with end up dissapointed, should be or with better world, it would be better if you would have the same 2 note ending, imo.

the second thing;

"All I need is that one guy
The one thats always been so true
The one that had the courage to give me all of him
And I had the strength to give him all of me too"

I think that u should delete the 4th verse and put a verse between the 2nd and 3rd and then let the third one rhyme with the second. The reason why is because imo when you use repeated parts in diffrent verses they should rhyme :) would sound better to me :)

anyways these aren't negative points but just my view on how you can make it even better :) hope it helped !

5/5, nice song all in all, just add another 4 versed stanza and then a 3 lined outro and the song will be great for sure ;)

peac

I loved the song I would change the chorus abit to this
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We are meant to be as one.
We are meant to be together dont you see it?
You're the only one I trust, so baby believe it.
Is there nothing I can say or do?
To make you realize the truth?
Baby, believe in love.
Believe in my love for you.
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Of course you don't have to make any changes just sugesstions but that's what it'd be if i were writing it but im not so yeah lol good job deff. keep up the work.