Casey,

I really enjoyed this, so I am now going to re-read it and comment...

Condemned to do what is told,
Forever unable, forever disabled.
The puppet swings,
As the puppet master plays with his strings.
Crying inside for the puppet only has one guide.
^^
I love how you introduce this, condemned is such a weighty word, a word that suggests unfairness from those with power. The next line pleases me also, mainly for the rhyme: unable and disabled. I like rhyme within lines, they always sing to me as I read them :O) The imagery of the puppet swinging and the 'male' puppet master dictating how and when the puppet should move. Again in the last line an internal rhyme!! At this point I am unsure what your puppet metaphor signifies? A great opening stanza.

A master that plays with his emotions,
He cannot fight back nor can he scream.
His only movement is with the puppet masters strings.
The puppet thinks, though no one can hear him he says,
"My emotions mean nothing, they are just bottled together,
In a frame for no one to hear, or no one to see,
These emotions are dead, and the meaning of love is unsaid.
For I am just the puppet, I do what is told, no questions asked."
^^
Very interesting, the master of the strings is not the master of himself, so he chooses to be the master of the puppet who has no voice, no choice, only to obey, resigned to a life of silent hell! This is all about power. The puppet master wrongly compensates for his lack of emotion by using his power, maybe his masculinity over the puppet, who may symbolise the 'female'? But, no, you mention the puppet as a 'he', so this seems to be about the master compensating for his insecurities and the puppet screaming silently!

I am the master, the master of a puppet.
Controlling emotions, deciding movements.
I play with my puppets strings for all to see, and enjoy
My puppet dances, my puppet swings,
Audiences love this character that I perceive,
Though this love is meaningless its still said.
They are in love with a puppet and I hold its strings.
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In this last stanza, my interpretation of your puppet and its master is torn. Your mention of the audience, makes be think that you could be referring to an art form. Like an actor who portrays a man of confidence when in all reality he is shy. Or a poet/ writer who paints a picture in words of a world and/or a person who they would rather be and/or live in!!?
I have worked with adults with learning disabilitiues, these adults often have little or no voice. Their choice are often made for them by people who may feel powerful being able to do this.

This is such an interesting poem and one where I am still left thinking.

Well done

Michael

"The puppet thinks, though no one can hear him he says,
"My emotions mean nothing, they are just bottled together,"
-I think you might just want to put a comma maybe after him.. unless I'm not thinking straight.. but I think in grammar that's how they do it?

This was a very amazing write. I applaud you on the title, that was amazing. This poem contained true emotions and was very sad. As for word-choice - it was pretty good. I found a few pretty good words that you used. Rhyme of the poem was consistant and flow was smooth.. Good job. :] This poem was flawless, 5/5. Well written.

That was beautifully crafted. Through this I am able to picture a cynical side to the human life and how many people are like what you described as the master. A very enjoyable read. Great work

cheers, josh

oh and where abouts in the Philippines are you from?

In the tittle since they are the puppet's strings you should have an apostrophe to show ownershipt....'

First off, I love metallica's song puppet master. :D:D:D <3<3<3

His only movement is with the puppet masters strings

master's-the ownership thing again.

In a frame for no one to hear, or no one to see,

The metaphor here was great, I felt and would be a better word used than or in this case however.

Though this love is meaningless its still said.

Mwa ha ha...wanna guess? That's WRONG! not for ownership this time, but to show it is it should be it's.

Other than that stuff the concept was great and you did pretty well with flow and imagery.

Five out of five.

Wow, this is a remarkably clever poem. The recurring metaphor of the puppet is so very true to many facets of life. I really enjoyed reading it. will definately be reading some more of your work!!!
5/5
Aish
xoxo

This poem is very good i loved it

This poem did sort of lack some structure. There appeared to be a lot of places where you put too many Stanza's together.

The second one is a prime example.

A master that plays with his emotions,
He cannot fight back nor can he scream.
His only movement is with the puppet masters strings.
The puppet thinks, though no one can hear him he says,

the first two are over shadowed by the bottom two. I think that you should break them into two's.

I'm not saying that this poem is something that I'm not happy I have read. I enjoyed the read and it kept me thinking about something.

I LOVED the metaphore and wished that you could have extended upon the poem. I think that it's a really good poem, it was just that the up and own flow and syllables took away from it.

I hope that this advice is able to help you in your next poem.