Wow such a wonderful poem, the repetitiveness here was a good thing, it made it more warming and easier to get involved in this poem, so it made it more personal.

i could relate to this, so could others with their feelings. the simplistic phasing was excellent and allowed you to be lulled into this poem, to i felt go to another world.

bravo, 5/5 David

Hey not spoken for ages hope your ok??! found it bit hard to follow sometimes but it were cool take care

Very emotional and true. Well expressed feelings. Nice job!