A bit liong but the lines are quik you dont feel the long poem

the concetp of the poem is not new , sorrow , but the figures used in it are very good specialy when you say try to grasp the air ,

and thelast stanza is very good

the flow of the poem the sadness is verygood writen

as mucht eh imagery are good i feel like the poem , trun about not new topic , and you need to create a exiting new image and new enviroemtn

in all it was a very godo writen poem no errors found and rhyming

great job

Not bad.. keep writing

Excellent piece truely beautiful

So sad... yet so nicely written... just 1 thing.

"She looks around
No one is there
She saw something
But it's only air"

perhaps she should look harder? :p

gret job hun!

5/5