I really loved it!

Beautiful!

Great poem you write with so much feelings

Wow. I really like this.

I enjoy reading poems that tell a story. You accomplished that very well in writing this.

I have no suggestions other than to watch the meter you choose to employ. Meter being the rhythm. That's not necessary though, it just makes it nicer on the eyes. The sacrifice you made for meaning over appearance was well chosen.

By the way, I apologize for not commenting back sooner. I rarely check my page on this site anymore haha.

Wow this is a beautiful poem hun. The emotion is tangible and it's quite a story. It feels like you're living it with the author. I espeically liked this stanza:

Yet, sometimes the anger and rage,
Would well up inside of me.
And I'd hate you for days,
But your eyes are what made me see.

I think it's so true that the eyes always give everything away. You are a very talented writer i hope to read more from you soon.

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