I like this particular style you used Sean. It's really hard to explain love but you came close enough. One thing though, it's a bit short don't you think?
Aken Sol

Ah well, I kinda felt like that was what I wanted to say, so that is all I wrote!

very cool and origanal. your full of origanality good work sean. I look forward to more of your poems

It is a nice poem. But i felt you should have written more... Its looks as if you just told something in a hurry...... But the style is good.

i think it was a fine length, sometimes short but sweet gets the message across, and in this case it does. great job!

that's really creative and cute. i liked it the way it was. made me smile. take care:) <---(see the smile?)