I dotn want to shien , i want to be shown

mme nicely put their ,

btu i disagree with you ,

you need to shine , to your man , to see you , adn you must glow , in his eyes, liek a pearly treasure ,

dont undersestimate this ,

sturcture wise , i think ,
you have a great poem
but need more little wor on the rhyming and it would be wonderfull

good one