I like the way that this is a clash between metaphor and reality. Although it was on/off rhyme the flow was pretty good and words were strong and worked.

Well done

Alex xx

Far out!
this poem is great :D

i really liked it.
not only was it a good poem, in a sense that it was written beautifully, but also becasue it was a great read.

great work

Watch out for cliche, the first verse was full of it.

"Thrown away like trash"
Surely you can come up with something better than that?

And using words like "honey" are only effective with lots of sarcasm behind it. Perhaps making your poem a little more bitter (a wider vocabulary) would be helpful.

Other than that, this was a good poem, it kept me reading through some of the weaker lines through to the end. And I like the ending, it's not cliche (like the first stanza) and refreshing, as well as dark.

Good work, 4/5

jess ~

Mmm, it was good, i'll admit that, but to me it needed more anger and hatred, some words just felt to loved up and not as if you really wanted to make someone feel pain like you had. I liked it though very much