I don't much like the style of poem you've chosen, your wording is ok. I find it to be quite descriptive but not enough feeling put into it. Nothing special. 3/5

I don't much like the style of poem you've chosen, your wording is ok. I find it to be quite descriptive but not enough feeling put into it. Nothing special. 3/5

Wow. Honestly, I thought some of the rhymes were off, and the flow didn't fit throughout. But the way you wrote the poem, first from the view of the teen and then the boy. It really was an incredibly emotional poem. Using simple words, 'Bang' and the talk of the gangs, rather than complicated vocabulary and riddled lines meant that the full power and impact of the poem was blunt, and incredibly strong.
Amazing write, really excellent.

Sole x

In all honesty, this is amazing.
It kept me reading the whole way through with a terrible, tragic story as the muse for this.
Darn, poor, poor kid.

I can't think of anything that could improve this, as it is more of a story than a poem. But it's still a good quality piece.
Keep writing, 5/5

jess ~

Oh wow wow...!! This poem is verryy well-wriiten... And extremely sad!! I love the way u manage to tell different stories in just this one poem so very captivatingly.... I'm srsly speechless!! :)

5/5!
And this definitely goes to my favourites! =)Keep It Up!

This poem brought me to tears because ii lost my best friend to gang violence. it just reminded me of how ugly the world can be sometimes.but then again everything happens for a reason. Great poem =)