Title - Nice job. I loved the word "admist" Great word choice instead of using a word like "between" or something. Good title. :]

"And promptly stop, drop and roll into the bleeding thorns of verve,"
`Stop, drop, and roll..I so wasn't expecting that to come out. Very very well done. I loved this line more than anything.

Overall, a wonderful write. Honestly, there are no mistakes in this piece. I loved how you used the title, it was amazing. The last light highlighted the whole poem because it contained the title. Wonderful write. Impressive. 5/5.