Ooh. I really liked this. I thought the rhymes were excellent, and props for finding that many things to rhyme with "time". Haha.

"One hundred percent of the time
When I try to write a rhyme
It begins with a single thought
To deal with what time has brought"

-- This was really good. You opened the poem by talking about writing a rhyme. Clever, if you ask me, since you're writing a rhyme as you say it.

"One hundred percent of the time
We all must have a mind to climb
Where our wandering hearts will lead
One hundred percent is what we need"

-- I liked this to ened the poem, too. I feel as though, not only does the piece come to an end, your wrds come to an end. Sometimes, in a poem, the words seem as thought they can continue even though the piece is done.

Five out of five.

``Briana

Wow, this one actually made me think. At church today we were talking about prophets, and how they were always spreading the truth in God's word. This is a great poem. I like the emotion in it. It's not really sad, but not all the way appy. It gave me the feeling of, curiosity. Everything you've written is true.

"One hundred percent of the time
We all must have a mind to climb
Where our wandering hearts will lead
One hundred percent is what we need"

I love this part the most. It was a great way to end the poem. And I agree with Bree. This one does feel as if the endings just right. It needs no more, and no less.

Great Work.

5/5

Wow i loved this piece its very thought provoking and extremly interesting. I dont think anybody has portrayed this type of poem quite like this before, excellent job!
The flow was very good and the rhyming was great!
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I never understood people who said 110% because you can't give more than a 100% and honestly if you feel you can give more then you're not really giving 100% to begin with. I really enjoyed the second last stanza and I thought the words were all to true...very strong finish and definately honest spoken words from the heart. Excellent work 5/5 GG23

This is so well written... I thoroughly enjoyed reading it... I have read it so many times... the words beautifully roll out... the last two stanza are wonderful...

"One hundred percent of the time
We all must have a mind to climb
Where our wandering hearts will lead
One hundred percent is what we need "

^^very true.. to achieve what our wandering hearts actually want.. we need to give hundred percent ....
beautiful ending of a beautiful poem...

I really love the topics you write on... they are always so different.. and unique...
As usual this one is also superb...

keep writing... :)