That was amazing. Pure emotion

"We are a perfect pare girl
so why don't you free your heart
this beautiful love can not begin
if your to afraid to let it start"

That was gold! 5/5 keep writing!

I absolutely loved this. your an amazing writer.

--aprils conspiracy

This one is a good poem... keep it up... i feel the same way some day and then some days i get so confused... so yer... emotions are gay aye... they make us normal people turn to jelly and tears!! aye... mwa
margi

Who's this one about???
the stupid gurl ima throw my phone at?
well... I LOVED IT!!!
its one of ur bestest!!=)
oh...
btw...
I wrote u a poem... ima send it on myspace... love u.

It was really good, sad but good. I know how it feels.. cept with the opposite gender.

"We are a perfect pare girl"
One spelling error, it should be:
"We are a perfect pair girl"
Thats all I could find, it was really good, ill be reading on..
keep it up!
*Chaotic Angel*
5/5

Same here ....

I cant laugh anymore
i am an empty box
a beautiful sea shell
lost beneath the rocks.

^ This is a great intro to a wonderful piece. I really love the way you went about getting your point across and setting an emotional tone in such a beautiful way. though the word i in the second line probably should be capitalized to keep your voice strong and continue the consistency of the rest of the piece.

I cant cry anymore
my emotions have been killed
no more happy days
this cup of tears has been filled.

^ the first two lines here are very strong and have a unique pull to them. the second two are also unique but in a much more poetic, fitting way. (i hope that makes sense) but i like the flavor of this stanza

I cant be me anymore
without you by my side
every time you go away
a part of me dies

^ at first this stanza felt cliche' but when i read the piece a second time i found a lot more depth to it. the way you tried masking the fact that you were pouring your heart and soul out to this person took me a minute to realize. (sorry) great effect.

You confuse me girl
when you give me that smile
and when we lay awake for hours
just laughing and talking for a wile

^ in the last line i think wile should be "while". other than that this stanza is great and i love the innocence to it. the way you are saying sooo much without really saying much at all. (Also a lot of people can relate to this stanza so excellent job there).

We are a perfect pare girl
so why don't you free your heart
this beautiful love can not begin
if your to afraid to let it start

^interesting conclusion but very well written.

All in all, I love this piece. It is completely wonderful/ your voice shines through in such a creative way (using cliche's to your benefit) and adding a whole new depth to some pretty tired things. I think whoever you wrote this for or inspired it is amazing and that you truly penned something excellent. nice job :)