Comments : A Rose For Every Occasion

  • 15 years ago

    by Nobodys Hero

    Such a sad yet beautiful poem, your very talented, Even though the meaning in your poem is some what masked you can still feel the deep emtion put into it, Excellent job 5/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I think the poem was beautifully penned, clever, great use of a metaphor, the rhyming doesn't seem forced.

    I thought the flow was off in these 2 lines:

    ^I shall deliver onto you a china rose to gracefully
    Illustrate your ever fresh beauty.^

    It just wasn't in sync with the rest of the piece. I wouldn't say deliver unto you....maybe Bestow? I would also take out the to between rose and gracefully and change the next line to Illustration of your beauty or something.....

    I really enjoyed reading this, you did a really nice job!