A very unique write, i dont think iv'e seen a poem quite like this on here before! Great job =]
I also think the tittle of your poem is brilliant, i was intrested before i even began reading

What a beautiful poem, very unique. I really enjoyed reading it.

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The end was just sad.. like some deception..
the title was really catchy, made me want to read it. i wasn't disapointed
keep writing ^^

Wow interesting story potrayed here, great poem and very nice word choice. I must say a very enjoyable read!

5/5

I loved it. The ending really surprised me! That's pretty mean, I hope it isn't a true story
5/5

Great poem, this poem is really different from many that I've read on this site. I think it's sad but touching and leave the reader want more...........GJ

Amazing poem u wrote here. I love it! thw words were just beautiufl. the flow was nice. this was very unqiue but amzing. it was just a big WOW!! i love it. and keep it up! Great job.
5/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

Ooof. the ending is so sad. wow. definately powerful. the building of hope, the youthful need, and that crushing at the end. and the ugliness of it contrasts so starkly with the beauty of the beginning. (i dont mean your writing btw) Great job!

Oh... Really excellent poem... (5/5)