This poem has a very nice flow, great job. I found it a really interesting and original write =]
Excellent piece 5/5

Umm, well the flow was good and the wording is different. It isn't the easiest to understand though, changing some of the words might help with that. Other then that it is a great poem. 5/5

Well... it's a very creative and fantastic write. The title is very interesting. You've constructed the poem very well... an intelligent write.

It kinda got mi confused but i kinda got it when i read it again. flow was nice. words are different not a poem i read b4. unique i say. i like it. nice job. just a bit confusing for me.
4/5

TaKe CaRe,
Frenchy

I find it a little confusing, but overall a good write. you definately have a way with imagery. and there is no awkwardness with the flow of the words. nice job!