Comments : Between Two Hearts (Collab with End Of Eternity)

  • 11 years ago

    by End Of Eternity

    Wishing things were different
    Another place another time
    Souls connected across oceans
    Two hearts forever entwined

    What a heartfelt starting dear, just loved the stanza and the meaning every word hold inside.
    Its so nice to have another collab with you, am surely the lucky one.

    thank you for this beautiful piece.

    all the best and take care

  • 11 years ago

    by Deana

    This is really an excellent ,heartfelt write. When two people connect it is so easy to see the harmony between them.It is very hard to tell this is a co-lab, it could just as easily be seen as coming from just one person. As it should be.A great job.

  • 11 years ago

    by - Mr. Darcy

    Cindy, i will read as I comment, so if its disjointed, I apologise inadvance :)

    Wishing things were different
    Another place another time
    Souls connected across oceans
    Two hearts forever entwined
    ^^
    This is a familiar feeling, wanting circumstances to be different, distances to be dramatically reduced perhaps?

    Tears would have smiled brightly
    Leaving covetous pain behind
    Life appreciate it's worthiness
    When only love fills our minds
    ^^
    This is a lovely stanza, beautifully written. If only life could be different and loves gift given every chance to blossom and sing its true song, If only?

    Spirits flying through the night
    Traveling hot desert sands
    Sending all my love to you
    Hold it gently in your hands
    ^^
    Such a dreamy sweet verse full of imagery. Words floating, spanning the vast distance. You mention desert, this really creates a distance for me. Love sent maybe by letter, a letter that can be read again and again and kept close to a persons heart.

    Sky would crack just to bless
    This love that we hold inside
    Heart would travel distances
    Undoing tears that we have cried
    ^^
    In the presence of love the sky would crack - wonderful tribute to love, not just any love, perhaps the greatest love of all?
    This is clearly a poem about two hearts in love and the anguish felt when distance keeps this love from its physical embrace.

    Well done

    Michael

  • 11 years ago

    by Dixiedaisy

    Cindy,
    As I have said before I do not know how you two do it. You blend such magical pieces woven into a poem that will touch the heart and make it melt. I love it. I will leave the rest as I left it for Nitin. I enjoyed the read immensely.

    I was so rocked with emotion from this beautiful write. Yes, I know the story behind the friendship and that makes it all the more special to know where the words came from and why. You two share the uncanny ability to finish each others sentences and thoughts. It really shows through in this piece. I had never thought it possible before you two to have a friend soul mate. I honestly thought it was something shared for lovers only.

    Wishing things were different
    Another place another time
    Souls connected across oceans
    Two hearts forever entwined

    ^ If things were different it may not be what we want. Everything happens for a reason, and for you two to be connected this way is such a treasure. It brings so much for each and their needs.

    Tears would have smiled brightly
    Leaving covetous pain behind
    Life appreciate it's worthiness
    When only love fills our minds

    ^ I don't believe the word "would" fit here because of one reason. You do share so much and the tears already smile brightly at the mere mention of the others name.

    Spirits flying through the night
    Traveling hot desert sands
    Sending all my love to you
    Hold it gently in your hands

    ^I honestly believe this stanza was the key to it all. Your spirits connect in an awesome entanglement. Hold it gently, the heart and the love it gives is very fragile.

    Sky would crack just to bless
    This love that we hold inside
    Heart would travel distances
    Undoing tears that we have cried

    ^^ All I can say is that I hope one day this stanza becomes a thing of the past and that you will meet that dear true friend.

    Lovely read from the both of you and I never know which stanza is written by whom. It always blends perfectly.

  • 11 years ago

    by Rachel RTVW

    I was just thinking the same thing that it is hard to tell who wrote which stanza. You two mesh well. A dream, a hope, a loving friend across the seas....Beautifully penned, excellent flow....touching...

  • 11 years ago

    by Sourav

    Wonderful poem and ending is great! Very flawless write.
    It starts with an intense emotion...
    "Wishing things were different
    Another place another time
    Souls connected across oceans
    Two hearts forever entwined"
    Very heartfelt...

    "Spirits flying through the night
    Traveling hot desert sands
    Sending all my love to you
    Hold it gently in your hands"
    What wonderful lines! So much of passion and love in to it! Something expressed the immense love to other. Very delicate indeed.
    And as I said last stanza is terrific. Makes the poem perfect!
    Great poem by you two! Awesome!

  • 11 years ago

    by Prasad B

    Lovely piece of writing... Loved the whole poem...

    Keep it up

  • 11 years ago

    by gracey grey

    Lovely poem here Cindy. I love it more simply because it begins with wishes....."wishing things were different".......kinda take me to places....... You two compiled the whole poem beautifully. Awesome!!!

  • 8 years ago

    by PinkyPrincess

    Aww.. this poem is so beautiful! I love it and I really am touched by it. I can really relate to the story of this poem. It's so sad to share love with someone from far but it makes you closer in some ways too... Wonderfully written.