Wow.what a nıce poem.ıt was really wonderful and so touchıng.I thınk ıt ıs your fırst love poem but ıts really amazıng.

may allah bless you.gıve u 5 poınts.

What a perfect style in writing!!...I'm so amazed really!
U expressed ur feelings in a very simple way..
It was so touchable.
Great job..
Keep it up:)..

It tells a lot.. More than what's written..!
It really moved me.. Like it 5/5
keep it up
regards

It tells a lot.. More than what's written..!
It really moved me.. Like it 5/5
keep it up
regards

I liked it, you used good wording and it is a nice length. I think that if you were to put spaces in it then it would flow better but other then that it's great. 5/5

Thanks for the advice Britt, I took it. I see that my poem does flow much better now!

Damn you're good :D
this one totally blew my mind !!

Your a roller coaster that I don't want to ride.
Give me some credit, I have pride.

this part drew a wide smile across my face :)

"I'm the particles of dust you leave behind."

one line worth a whole poem !!
it's so amazing that this is the 5th time i rewrite my comment about it. i'm really speechless it just took my breath away .what a picture you painted with that one !

I shall no longer surf, now I'm finally brave.
Your an emotional destructive Tidal Wave.

strong ending to a powerfull poem
nice choice of title :)

Thanks for the great comment Mostafa!

Wow this is a very sad poem...the metaphors tt you used depicts the picture so clearly
of your relationship.The flow was very smooth indeed and i like the ending

5/5 from me