Deana
I cried as I read your words. This is the everlasting love. So rare and hard to find. Yet it seems when it is found it is taken to soon :(

Will you try to change me
In the future down the road
Or walk beside me through it all
Stand tall and share the load

Just the imagery within your words brought back so many memories for me.

When life becomes a little rough
My hair has turned to gray
Will you still smile and look at me
In that special way

When we do change and that person you love still looks at you with that sparkle in their eyes. Tells you your still beautiful...yet when you look in the mirror it says different. This is a true love.

Will you take my hand in yours
If I become to weak to try
Still lay my head upon your chest
If I should need to cry

They are always there being strong for you when you are at your weakest. Giving you their strength and courage to go on.

As the years take their toll
Our time is almost through
Will you kiss my lips and say
Forever... I'll love you.

Wow......the tears are still flowing....this was absoultly beautiful. Made me miss someone so much more then I already do.
Wonderful job!
Love Cindy

Very vivid and touching. Its scary knowing one day I will age too....uncertainties ruling one's soul, one needs reassurance which your poem clearly points out. The 3rd stanza second line "if i become to weak to try"did you mean "too"?

This is the tough part for me as i m out of words. Though English is not my first language but no matter which language...i still would have been speechless while commenting for this one.
Its a simple poem which could make any reader simply drown in it with a smile. Loved it all the way.

all the best and take care

Awww...what a sweet poem. True love is by far the most powerful emotion of all. And love itself is the most difficult thing to describe, yet I believe you just described exactly what its like to have true love. Its a lovely poem. Very creative and sweet. If you have not already, may you find a love like that.

Omg That was soo Damn Cutte YO!! awwww lol

Beautifully penned! Good flow and rhythm. Great job putting this together. The rhyming is not forced. You did a really nice job!

For writing this poem, i sure as hell would!
the flow you gave this piece was phenominal, made reading it almost elegant. this poems reinforces everything that marraige is about, good job! 5* by far

Will you try to change me
In the future down the road
Or walk beside me through it all
Stand tall and share the load

^^If he says no to the first one and yes to the second question, it is real love.

When life becomes a little rough
My hair has turned to gray
Will you still smile and look at me
In that special way
^^^^ a man that loves you as you are ageing is a very rare species indeed. If you have one, hold on to him!

Will you take my hand in yours
If I become too weak to try
Still lay my head upon your chest
If I should need to cry
^^^to lay your head upon a man's chest is one of the most comforting things to do:)

As the years take their toll
Our time is almost through
Will you kiss my lips and say
Forever... I'll love you.^
^^^the ultimate test and a perfect ending to a poem full of true love-questions!

A very sweet poem by you, Deana, I am sure any woman that is our age can relate to!

Hugs,

Ingrid 5/5

When i read this i automaticaly thought of the perfect way to ask a girl if hses down for me. i could just give this poem to a her n ask her wut she thinks n if shes about it then everything is straight i really like this poem alot alot alot hahaha