Simply an amazing write. I mean the feelings were there and every line just seemed so perfected in the sense that it just came together so well and yet so effortlessly written. Excellent work! Keep it up! 100/5 from me.

I think I can imagine this poem sung and it would be a great song :).. so lyrical and sweet

Although I have to criticize some small things..
The chorus lines were sort of average..you needed more creativity and romance to strengthen them
Buuuut still it didn't lessen the beauty of the song =]

I thought the first two stanzas rocked the whole piece.
very well done...I'm actually encouraged to write a song, so I'll take this as a motivation for me
Thanks for sharing

Write on
xx

This one I think is your best! Although it sucks that I don't know how to read it lol. I tried reading it as a song but I'm not sure what the rhythm is supposed to be. They're great lyrics though and great emotions!

WOW... This is really very goOd! It's... sad n cute at the same time... :) The flOw, rhyming... everything is perfect!

Keep It Up!
5/5. :)