HMmm well if I may say this was alright.
I think some sugeestions to make it better puncuation. Like when you have questions put a question mark.
Maybe some rhyming. Although not necessary.

But yea it seemed alright. You got uot what you wanted to say. Maybs more desciptions are needed tho.

WOW this is so so gloomy and devastating... and i love how you say that even with beauty you can never be happy without the one you really love. sweetheart... but let me tell you something... this was not meant to be. your one true soul mate is still out there, i promise you this. stay strong ok? this one broke your heart, and for a reason... that reason is that someone out there is still waiting for you. :)

Amazing job I really enjoyed it.

Lacking of punctuations make it less interesting! it's okay but can't say good. very emotional write but you could have made it more poetic.

Yeah i didnt relize that untill amber mentioned it i will try to remember next time i write something thanx all ur advice appreciated=]