Dude this poem is amazing i love it sooooooooo much

Nice poem..Well written & beautifully penned 5/5

SWeet! i am just telling you right now THAT I, me, Elizabeth Cares about you!

HI, EmoBritboo, For some pointers;)
I see the message your trying to convey- If you add some words to some of those lines, it will help to smooth it out a little more. Some of it can be a little confusing for the first read. You might want to have separate lines for your quotes, to clear it up. Don't be affraid to play around with the words. That's the great thing about poetry! And keep writting! ;)

Wow thats really good i love it

You're a really talented writer. i love that you go from reality and painting the scene to what if. :) great job 5/5.