Really good!

You did it again!

lovelovelove this.
yes. lol
it rocked.

I really like it!
I loved the books of course, so your poems just naturally awesome :P

This is really good i love BD and all the other books in the twilght. this was a really good idea and i like how it match with the book like i could see it in my head nice job love your word play. 5.5

Um.. Tried? it was beautiful. The ryhming is solid.
It had really good flow, you should tell me next time you write a poem. i wanna see it. 5/5

Well even though i havent read the book, i like this poem because of the words you use to make a picture in my head. Awesome job
-vino

Actually the first line of the third stanza sort of threw the flow off for me. There's something about it that doesn't exactly go together with the rest. I don't know how to explain it. Maybe it's just me. Despite not reading the novels, I still find this piece intriguing and with sharp images.
~Faith-less

Faith of the Fallen:

By the third stanza she changes theory on what to do to protect her family but i can see how that threw off the flow and lost you. :]

Haha this is so interesting :D I've never read a poem based on breaking dawn such a creative idea. My favorite stanza was I think the second one? Because it says "shield you with my mind and love" I think there you are portraying Bella in this poem, am I correct? Because she has that field in which she can protect those around her :D It's an amazing poem and it also makes an interesting read.
You really have caught Bella's personality because she always think about others before herself. Also the last stanza I find very cute because it introduces the family and how you are going to stick together :D
Amazing read. xxxxx Keep it up
xxxx Roxy