Comments : Message

  • 15 years ago

    by kelleyana

    This is absolutely beautiful, a very strong message.
    Somethings that people ignore, maybe of importance to another, infact thats the message i get. well written and really meaningful, keep it up, kel.

  • 15 years ago

    by No Need For A Name

    I find it confusing throughout...that is, until the ending. It makes a wonderful thing out of nothing. My only complaint is I believe you fall out of rhythme every once and awhile. Very good.

    Peace and prosperity,

    (RKD)

  • 15 years ago

    by Lauren

    What I think this poem is saying is that we over look so many things all the time, and take so much for granted. We ignore and overlook so many things. Lovely things. If we would just stop for a second to observe and take in things we could be a little more appreciative. That is what I think you are saying in this poem.

  • 15 years ago

    by LoreNz0

    The message i got from this really well written poem wasy to not let anything go unnoticed, to read between the lines and to appreciate everything and everyone everyday.

    the wording was sublime, it had a good message that was niether cryptic nor too obvious for the reader, and the excellent rhyming was the iceing on the cake. 5* fav*

  • 15 years ago

    by Jenni Marie

    "A leaf on the ground,
    a cloud in the sky,
    a book on a shelf,
    you don't notice, but I"

    ^^ What a beautiful way to start this piece, I really liked this opening verse.

    "see a pattern, a picture,
    an image, a face,
    an adventure forgotten
    but not to be erased.

    Find a treasure in a snowflake,
    a picture on a door,
    a reason and a purpose
    in things thrown 'bout the floor."

    ^^ I enjoyed the imagery you portrayed here, it made the piece all the more real for me, however I'm noticing that you seem to have quite a few fillers which is putting me of a little.

    "Hear the constant need for answers,
    the search for knowledge, true,
    the one among the many
    who now sees things anew

    Search for memories lost
    where items can't be found.
    Remember how it used to be
    when to love you weren't bound"

    ^^Favourite stanzas of the piece, I really enjoyed these two, they brought out many conflicting emotions for me as the reader, and such nostalgia.

    "Wish for things forgotten,
    desires overlooked,
    see things for what they truly are
    Not a cover, but a book.

    Not a building in a city,
    but a mystery unfurled.
    Not some poem on a paper
    but a message to the world. "

    ^^..I don't even know what to say about these verses except that I find them beautiful, I love the meaning here, and you've managed to wrap this piece up with such beautiful and elegant writing.

    Well done!

  • 15 years ago

    by Gizmo

    Rite i honestly think that this was fantasic, the meanings behind it were incredible crafted into the poem. this was a message to the world, i love the flow the quickness of the entirity of the poem.

    Wish for things forgotten,
    desires overlooked,
    see things for what they truly are
    Not a cover, but a book.
    - this definitly is the bets stanzain the poem i love it.

    just fabulous 10/10 xx