Comments : Hollow memories

  • 15 years ago

    by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash

    My smile is fake
    but you said you were never hurt
    but I know its you who is suffering now that I am
    gone and all you have left
    is the walls to sing you there truthful yet painful song

    Your first line , did you mean "my" or 'your " smile is fake

  • 15 years ago

    by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash

    My smile is fake
    but you said you were never hurt
    but I know its you who is suffering now that I am
    gone and all you have left
    ARE the walls to sing you THEIR truthful yet painful song

  • 15 years ago

    by Grant Gilbert AKA Slash

    Your poem is a well written testament to your maturity of your situation and i'm so proud to see your growth, it also shows in your poems and the way you write.Well done Shellaine

    Grant