I like the way its written. but the lines with afire and mine at the end of it sound wordy. its good.

It is actually an interesting and cute poem. i think some of your newer ones are better, but this one is really good also! keep it up!

-Kelseyy.

Maybe limit your word usage to make it fit into stanzas. Otherwise it's good poem wise.

Sometimes it got a bit confusing, but on the whole I liked it.
The rhyme of life and wife is, well, very slightly cliche, but that was okay, there was an innocent joy in it that clearly made up for any mistakes or cliches...

"I hold you close within my heart and in my arms you lie."

I liked those lines, because it was as though you were saying, if you hold someone close in your heart, eventually they will lie in your arms, which is a beautiful image to imagine.

//T.L.//

I think you expressed yourself beautifully. It flowed so smoothly and obviously contains much love.
The only criticism I have is the layout.
Personally I would split it into stanzas or at least smaller lines dictated byu the rhyme scheme.