This is a good poem. it didnt flow very well, but it was still a good poem. The rhyming was done ok, but it could do with a little bit of work. I think what put the poem's flow off was the long sentenses in the third, fourth and sixth stanzas. but apart from that, it was a good poem.

Kal

Honestly speaking... I really loved your poem! Fantastic concept and your expression is very good. More than the structure the emotions that you've shown in this poem is really touchy. Wonderful write!

Ohh thx u guys for the comment well I actually wrote it on 24 Sept itself...kindda got these word all these words stuck in my head.So i decided to piece em' up together while i was at work...well for you info actualli this is like the 'trilogy' of my previous 2 poems... Secret Admirer n Secret Admirer 2...do check em' out n u'll understand why i had to write this poem;)

A sad write from you. This must have been painful to search yourself in order to organise your raw memories and feelings into a poem.

This lady is now moving in different circles and I know you must wander if she ever thinks of you. The way you have described your relationship, she can't not think about you, like you do her.

Memories can be painful, but they can also be sweet and can last for eternity. Hang on to those sweet memories, as no one can take those away.

You never know, fate may smile upon you.

Take care

Michael

It tells a great story but the flow could have been a bit better. I really enjoyed it though :) Keep it up :)

This poem is really heartfelt and dripping with emotion. each line is stained with the emotional burden that you have.

There are flow issue's that really did come into play. Syllables are way off kilter and it sometimes goes into a ramble.

I really think that this is a poem that a lot of people can relate to. They see a person who they know..but are unsure of how to approach them...very well done. I loved this poem.

5/5