Comments : Im waiting for you

  • 15 years ago

    by Kaila

    Again you had a lot of spelling errors, I really think punctuation would help you out too. It was kind of a cliche, for me. I really didn't find anything intresting in this piece
    3/5

  • 15 years ago

    by Hannah

    Well for this one is good, and most important u had expressed whats inside ur heart sincerely. so dont worry i wont give it down votes coz i know ur effort for making this poem..

  • 15 years ago

    by Ash

    A really well written poem. Your style is quite unique and different but I think that is what makes this poem so special.

    "I'm waiting for you my love
    everyday I long to see your face
    wish you right here by my side
    cuz I want to feel your sweet cares
    and heard your brilliant voice "

    ^^This was a nice opening but I feel that instead of saying "wish you right here..." you should rather say "wish you were right here by my side".

    "All night long I feel so lonely
    dreaming one day you're here
    join me and feel the love we had
    and take all the loneliness
    that I use to hide everyday"

    ^^This was another well written stanza though i feel that instead of the word "use" you should say "used". I also feel that the word "join" should be in capital letters and the next line should not have "and".

    Well these are my personal opinions that I feel would add a greater certainty and feeling to this poem. But none the less it was a great poem.
    5/5 from me.