One of the beautifukll epic stories i have ever read even i hate long ones , ,

the monster that seem like that but he is not violent , and the despare to dir his own way ,

when she slap him i could see it and imagine it very good , !!

great one thank sto your poetry like this one i am beguining to be intrested in long ones again!!!!

Extreemly emaginative, and still powerful! A dark poem with a story...
It was very interesting. It pulled me in the more I read. I realy don't have any other comments. that was awsom!;)

WOW JEN! You had be under suspence the whole time wondering what would happen next! I didnt even notice or mind the length because it was all so interesting. It flowed so nicely and your rhyme was flawless. I could tell it was well thought out and what imagination! I would love to read more if you continued this series or maybe this was the end? Nonetheless I really enjoyed it.

Well done!
*5/5*

I often wonder when I read some of the poets collections were the dark and sad side comes from when the persons profile says they are a teenager or a youth but I know even the young in this life can suffer. I still found it sad when after reading 2 of your love poems they too were filled with images of suicide and doubt whatever happened to Joy.

This poem has a lot o merit but it is not as convincing or conveying as the first immortal man and at times I found it hard going thus I gave you 4/5 Ray S I find very rarely that follow up poem reach the origins heights.