First stanza took my breath away with each word. Wow! Your ideas are priceless.
I also like ending lines of second stanza, very remarkable in my opinion.
All in all I am impressed by your writings, they are all so original and honestly I can't describe how much I enjoy in atmosphere, imagery and inspiration that you work simply creates.
You should be proud on your talent!

Wow... that made me speechless. that is DEFINATELY one of my favorite poems. great title, amazing word choice. i love your poem and keep up the wonderful work :) 5/5