Lol i love this

Not good?? i loved this poem!!! it wasnt forced it had a purpose and a great flow. cant wait to see more!

Lol.. this reminds me of a guy in my 8th grade class writing a poem for his gf.. he pretty much had me write it for him haha..
neways.. i love the poem.. it is really good.. ESPECIALLY since you wrote it so late :)

This poem is so awesome! the setting, the way you wrote it and its funny. it wasnt forced, it just flowed. and you showed yourself in the poem. this is awesome i love it =]]

Ahahah!
i loved this poem it made me smile and giggle inside =)
keep up the good work !