Whoa,,great!its so nice,,i really feel the emotion brought by the words,
i really like the line "Babe you're good as dead"
yeayea thats cool,,
"I see you eye her lips"
nice choice of w0rds,xD

the lines "I keep my finger on the trigger or" and "Maybe I'll just fire" makes me smile,,^^

over all its good,, 5/5 keep up