Comments : Wars

  • 15 years ago

    by Whisper

    Okayy. I've said this before. But I'm reallyy not good at criticizing.

    i really like the poem. and the thought/meaning behind it. the only thing that got me was the last 4 stanzas seem a little... odd. like, ready to give in. and then, she wasn't ready. maybe there could be another stanza or 2 before having her not ready to give up.

    and then the last stanza seemed to be the total opposite of what the stanza before it was saying.

    *sigh* i dont like saying negative things. =( cause i love you. but on a positive note. I really liked the meaning behind the poem. really really. and maybe i just wasn't reading it right. someone may read it and think its perfect. so what i said isnt personal. <3 you.

  • 15 years ago

    by iFallToPieces

    Wow, this was a great poem. Loved the flow and rhyming. Very sad but greatly written.

    5/5