This is a very interesting style that you have going on here. I do like it as it is very unique and feel that it's somthing that not many could do.

I will say that you shouldn't restrict your vocab. it will perhaps hinder the poem and what you would like to do.

I think it was very well done 5/5 for orignality.

Oi this is a good poem...really all the lines from the novel?it's good really. 5/5