This is really good. i like how it just all flows together. i really like this poem. good job! 5/5

Hey Temps very well written, i like the sense of discovery of new and better things, the possitive attitude that exudes from the poem. The dark and dismal always with the light shining somewhere up ahead.
First line * distinguishing did you not perhaps mean DISSIPATING or maybe even DISPERSING*

Grant

Awosme!!:D

Wow that great. is ok. keep it up

Very powerful. I really like how you use imagry to further illustrate your point. It has a wonderful flow and you really managed to connect with the reader. great read.