Em I think this poem was really good.
I loved the wording and your way of expressing your inner feelings was just so sweet.
I have to criticize one little thing though..your lines are too long I think you should try to shorten them a little..I'm guessing you have a confusion in the length of the line.
Lets see what I can do :
You guide me through almost everything, you bring back my once blinded sight.
Why don't you change this to:
"you guide me through everything, bring back my once blinded sight."
Or maybe without the word "once", I just didn't wanna seem like I wanna change the words in the piece.
"How much I miss you, I can't say, there aren't enough words to describe."
This one could be changed to :
"How much I miss you, I can't say, words aren't enough to describe"
Idk I hope this doesn't annoy you, I'm just trying to help make the poem look better :)
But I still have to say nothing have lessened the beauty of this piece =]
Well done hun
13 years ago
by Love Panda
Absolutly amazing bunny bee, im glad you were able to write about him. sad times but you always make the best out of it all.