Comments : Your Smile

  • 11 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    This was a short, simple, cute poem. I loved how you started the poem out with describing that smile.. the words were simple but put a smile on my face.. now how ironic is that? :] Cute write, I loved the flow of the poem, it was a short poem but it still managed to flow very nicely and smooooth. Great work, I thought this poem was short but said a lot and makes the reader smile. Cute write. 5/5.

  • 11 years ago

    by Nicole the Fairy



    "Warm and bright ;
    Wide and kind .
    Full of delight ,
    And on my mind .
    Your smile heals ,
    Makes everything right .
    What your smile reveals ,
    Brings hope into sight."

    ^ A very sweet poem. I loved the words, 'bright, delight, heals, reveals, and hope'. and how you used them. Very cute poem, maybe could be a bit longer, but I think it's cute as it is :)

    Very well done, love the description.. of 'your smile'. Beautiful poem :)

    Well done :)

    [ 5 / 5 ]


  • 11 years ago

    by STEPHANiiE

    I this poem its cute and nice...reminds of my boo's smile

  • 11 years ago

    by CanUKissAwayMyPain

    Nice.. it is short but it says a lot. this poems reminds me of some1 smiles too.. i love it. Great job. =)

    take care,

  • 11 years ago

    by AngelicDecadence

    Very short, but thats not necessarily a bad thing.
    For that short of a poem, that was suprisingly well written, no offence! Just saying normally a poem so small and simple doesnt show that much. I have just been proven wrong, the poem was sweet. Nicely done.
    *Chaotic Angel*

  • 11 years ago

    by Nula

    This is very cute! =D

  • 11 years ago

    by Brittany C

    This is a good poem. The flow was good and I liked the word choice. It is short but to the point and it is good the way that it is. I can relate to it :) another 5/5

  • 11 years ago

    by Courageous Dreamer

    Very adorable, short yet gets the meaning across pretty nicely. The adjectives you used to describe this smile were simple but yet again, in such short few words you did get your point across and it makes the reader smile because the words are so beautiful.

    Well done.

  • 11 years ago

    by NeverBelieve

    So cute!
    good flow
    i liked it for a short one its good!

  • 11 years ago

    by H E Losey

    I enjoy short verses that tell an entire story as this does. The words are well chosen and the rhyme is on. I would recommend working on the metre/rhythm as the flow is not consistent, esp starting with line six. You could lengthen line five and that might get the flow back on time. Perhaps "Your smile always heals" but then there are two distinct beats.
    Oh well, this is just my opinion anyway

  • 11 years ago

    by kelleyana

    This is really beautiful. A great smile brings so much pleasure. It's like looking at a unknown person in the eyes and he smile with you and up you caught that flue and willing to comtaminates as mush as you can. A great smile has the power to light up one's heart. Short poem yet filled with meaning. Love your write, kel.

  • 11 years ago

    by forevertobeart

    Concise, but I believe if lengthened it would lose it's power. I thought the rhyme and flow were absolutely spot on and flawless, as was the wording you've used. Simple, yet elegant at the same time, and perfect for describing this person's smile, which does remind me of my own certain someone's smile. Beautiful piece, I enjoyed it. :)

  • 11 years ago

    by Lethmelodis

    Sorry my critique isn't exactly insightful or the like.

    Its just a flat out cute and simple little piece overall. Also, it seems to me like it'd make a good chorus in a song, or perhaps a refrain in a bigger piece of some sort. It just has a very sing-song quality to it, with a strong rhyme sequence (Idk, rhyme scheme doesn't seem like the correct words here), that just gives it a musical vibe.

    Great work :D

  • 11 years ago

    by Clown

    Well, its been said a million times, and a million times it was right, this is a very cute, no not even cute, just adorable poem. It made me smile, and i dont do that very much out here. Nicly penned and beautiful. I loved it.

  • 10 years ago

    by Lover Boii

    It's just beautiful. I like it a lot.