Comments : My heart is bleeding tears

  • 15 years ago

    by Katie

    So sad! I think you can make the rhythm flow a little better, though.
    "but to be my friend, no one wants to be" just change to "my friend, no one wants to be" and "I was born special, with a hunchback on my body" maybe change to "I was born with a hunchback on my body" to shorten it and make the flow better. But great job! 5/5 definitely!

  • 15 years ago

    by iFallToPieces

    Awww, this is a sad poem, but it is greatly written, very touching, shows how you shouldn't judge people on what they look like, but you should see them for who they are on the inside.
    Very good job
    5/5