Comments : The Path of Fate

  • 15 years ago

    by The Angel of Secrets

    I gotta say, I'm impressed that you managed to use the rhymes "love" and "above" which are used very often, in such a natural way. With those kind of well-used rhymes it's important to make it flow properly. Well done!

    Finding a matching soul requires walking
    The path for happiness lays far ahead
    Beware of those who'll break your heart
    And those who enjoy making you sad

    ^ What a great stanza, I really enjoyed it, it was flawless.

    Anyways, great poem all in all. I liked the theme and the atmosphere of it all. Excellent work.

    Love,
    The Angel of Secrets