Very different style of writting then I am use to seeing, however; I liked it. The flow was good and the overall use of your wording was well thought out. The only thing I didn't really like about it was the structure, it was all over the place, some stanzas were 2 lines, some 3, some 4, etc. I personally think it would be better if all the stanzas were the same length. Excellent job, keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Awe .. This is adorable . I wouldn't call it dark though , you might want to change the category . I really do like the whole starlight fading idea , I really can't get over that . Your ideas flow really well idea , and your wording is decent too . Well done , 5/5