Very good flow. I would love to know if this was inspired by real feelings or if it was purely creative incentive.

The flow I found to be a bit off, but the rhyme scheme brought the whole thing right along again.

I dont know what I should give you for a rating. Part of me wants to give you a five and another part of me wants to give you a four. Understant though, if you will, that i believe you have great potential and you could go very far with your Writing.

--Vaughn