It's always been very nice expressed.. I like it 5/5
regards,
Shokry

Cuz you're the one that I fall in love like in this dream of my emotion that I've always wanted.

^This doesn't make sense to me there is a word missing in there I would rearrange it

I keep them inside my heart
Cuz you're my destiny that have my heart!

^Repeat of the word heat throws me off here, you could keep the first line as

"I keep them inside

A good effort, hope I was helpful, keep on writing :)

This is a very good write =]
nice job ^^

I feel this one needs to be revised to make it little tidy. I appreciate your write but it could have been much more better and gripping.