A very intersting subject... :)
I liked your poem a lot... the vocabulary choice is strong and the flow is very good...
the poem itself is deep and intense...
i find the last stanza a little bit confusing... yet i have english as a foreign language, so it might be my lack of knowledge...

5/5
*isabel*

Perhaps it is just the way I was taught to read poetry, but the no punctuation at the end of your lines really confuses the flow.

I like how your lines are the same length in the first stanza, although the last line doesn't seem to quite flow.

In the second stanza "randomness" isn't the best word to use, it kind of ruins the feel of the poem.
The first line in this stanza is very strong though, great images.

Third stanza, rhyming life with anything never works, or very, very rarely works.
This stanza seems like rhyme for the sake of rhyme, it is perhaps a little too disiplined.

"No one would live to hear their extinct voices"
No one could live to hear extinct... umm.. obviously?

Last stanza, take out randomly in the first line, you don't need it there at all.
"Then from intelligence does one create the brain?"
Perhaps "When" instead of "then"?

Other than that, I really like this. I'm an angsty sort of person toward humanity, so this appeals to me a lot.
Your flow was okay, I'd suggest in the future you work on not making your poem quite so structured, let the words "run free" a little more, it'll create better images and flow.
Also, punctuation on the end of lines.

Sorry I focused on the few minor bad things in this, but I really like the theme. Still a 5/5

jess ~

"With no memories of molten ash
Where elements began to clash
Safely we assume and assert
Soon the earth would be the dirt"

^^ I really love this opening, the imagery you place here is beautiful and creates such vivid pictures for me as the reader.

"Seven seas could not quench fires
Of randomness without desires
Yet the air would feed passion's flame
Where nothing seems to stay the same

Did from the dirt spring all the life
Where no living creature felt the strife
Soon even that point would be mute
As though nature could yield bad fruit"

^^ I feel this is getting better and better as I go along, and with each stanza you write, you're adding more depth and emotion, the piece becoming stronger throughout.

"From the clouds there has come by chance the rain
Then from intelligence does one create the brain?
And from the heart which bore no desire
Did ashes and dirt, form life without fire? "

^^ I'm not to sure on this...I don't think you need the "and" in the third line, and the flow seemed a little of for me on the closing line whereas in every other part of the poem I found the flow to be absolutely flawless.

My favourite part of this piece would have to be the imagery, it's breathtakingly beautiful.

"Did ashes and dirt, form life without fire? "

^^ brilliant line I must say... something to think about...

I won't say this is your best write because I have read some of your mind blowing poems.. bt still a good read with a very different topic...

keep writing..

Very good poem. It makes a good point. The wording was strong and s was the flow. I gave it a 5/5. I agree with you on this one. Keep up the great work.

Very good poem. It makes a good point. The wording was strong and s was the flow. I gave it a 5/5. I agree with you on this one. Keep up the great work.

"Soon the earth would be the dirt"
Would? I think that you should replace 'would' with 'will'. Due to the simple fact that 'will' is grammatically correct.

I feel as if I'm constantly repeating myself with your poetry. And, I am. Absolutely, there's no question about it. I enjoy your poetry. There's rarely anything serious wrong with it, or anything in large amounts. So, your poetry is almost flawless, not quite. But, to me it's getting there. You've done a good job with writing these poems. I applaud your writing skills, Michael.