With them dead, who 'will' keep us alive?
With them dead, who 'shall' keep us alive?

Comment: 'Shall' is stronger than 'will'

They 'effect' are lives in so many ways
They 'affect' are lives in so many ways

Comment: 'effect' is the noun, 'affect' is the verb.
In this line, the correct word to use is 'affect'. They 'affect' us. Our lives are prone to the 'effect' of ...

They help us, and 'this is' how we repay?
They help us, and 'is this' how we repay

Comment: Words are switched for a better flow.

The rough grounds are 'bear' where they 'fell'
The rough grounds are 'bare' where they 'fall'

Comment: 'Bear' - bring forth, wear, have rightfully, behave
'Bare' - completely unclothed, naked

Looking into the future, it 'don't' look too bright
Looking into the future, it 'doesn't' look too bright

Comment: 'Future' is a single verb and 'do not' is plural.
The single of 'do' is 'does'.

The waters have rose and many people have 'drown'
The waters have rose and many people have 'drowned'

Comment: Verb agreement. 'Have' is to be followed by a past participle and 'drown' is the present tense, therefore, 'drowned' is to be used.

This is our future we have set I fear
This is our future we have set, I fear

Comment: The comma is to separate two ideas. Without the comma, the writer indicates that the line is one single idea. In this line, there are two ideas 'This is our future we have set' and 'I fear'

All in all, a good poem.
5/5

"The weather is crazy" isn't the most poetic phrase.
You need punctuation at the end of your lines.
And I think this goes too long.

You say the same thing but in slightly different ways for too long in this poem, deal with an issue then progress, that's important.
Also, with longer poems you really have to pull the reader in at the beginning with either emotions or images which this is lacking.

But that can be easily worked on.

Punctuation will help the flow a lot, and it guides the reader on how to read the poem.

I did like what you had to say in this, I agree for the most part.
The last two words sum up the whole poem wonderfully "I fear". Perfect.

I still liked this a lot, 4/5.

jess ~

I agree, you're in need of punctuation.
But as for the poem itself, I loved it!
You have some great talent, there is just a few kinks you need to work on with your writing. You have some great ideas in this poem, and I would love to see some more poems from you. 4.5/5

keep it up, and keep writing!

:)<3

Nice poem:)
I really enjoyed the way you did the rhyming. I haven't seen it done like that before. So very unique! The one thing I thought was lacking was the emotion. In my journalistic writing class were told to show and not tell, so maybe if you put in some sensory words more people would be drawn into the full depth of the story. 4/5

Overall this is a wonderful write, I loved the flow and the structure of this poem. The rhymes were good and didn't seem forced at all, excellent work.

The word, "are" in this line, "They affect are lives in so many ways." should be, "our" since you mean yours and others lives.

The word, "it" in this line, "All its doing it helping us stay around." should be, "is"

I liked the way this poem is about survival of the fit, even though you didn't come straight out and say it. Excellent write, keep up the good work.

Peace, Joe

Overall the meaning of the poem is good, but the presentation needs a little adjustment. I thought the words THEY THEIR OUR were used too much and too close together. There is a GREAT tool I found on this site; I use it all the time. Go to www.rhymer.com; it helps find words that rhyme, but it also has a thesaurus and dictionary link. This may help you find more powerful words. Instead of THE WEATHER IS CRAZY, try THE WEATHER IS FULL OF SUPRISE or SHIFTING SKYS OVERHEAD. Make good use of powerful words to climax reader’s attention.

I would also break up the flow a little bit. Using long lines sometimes let readers get lost in thought.

Looking into the future,
it doesn't look too bright.
The waters have rose
many people have drowned.
Many have starved,
illness is found all around.
Is this the future we want
to have in our sight?

Shorter stanzas seem to flow better. Lastly I would try to shorten the line down all together.

Looking into the future, it doesn't look too bright.
*The future does not look too bright (could be reworded)
**The future only holds a bleak and miserable path.

Overall, the poem was pretty good. Keep it up and take peoples comments to heart.