Comments : Forsaken somewhere within

  • 15 years ago

    by Ash

    "Forsaken somewhere within
    drinking words unspoken
    intranquilty rushing to begin
    carrying faithful prayers so broken"

    ^^Amazing start to this poem with such a vivid depiction but mesmerises me with such ease.

    The second stanza was just so amazing. Your choice of words seemed so perfect in the sense that it echoed more than just feelings and vivid description. It showed more than just a perfect picture of dark secrets.

    The repetition also added alot of emphasis into this poem. Overall it was another great work from you. 5/5