I'm not gonna lie all I felt through the poem was anger, no wait, selective anger I guess haha. I love how you can pour your emotion right into the poem with such ease and flow.

The rhyming scheme was unexpected, but it didn't mean it didn't fit perfectly at all. The vocabulary used here was simple yet effective, and at least to me it got to the point.

"Choking on the earth"
- I think you should either rephrase this or change it completely. Its not a mouthful, its just almost misplaced. In my opinion, that is.

a well deserved 5/5.

But that rhymes with the second line in the last stanza. what else do i put there then?